United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Alright.
This is totally classic horror right here. Reminds me of something that would be an episode of Night Gallery and Twilight Zone.
To have a dream and process through it as if it were real to then come to the conclusion that it may have actually happened.
Dang.
I like the concept of the story and I like how it moves fast as it pertains to the idea of the title being a "chase", but I feel it went too fast.
There is a beginning, middle and end, of course, yet I believe there is some missing material that would enhance the story such as a strong build-up describing actions that take place in the middle and further questioning/back-of-the-mind fear for the character that can settle at the end. The beginning was pretty darn neat and I like that it was straight to the point/action.
Ah, this reminds me of The Great Gatsby and Gone With The Wind (for some unknown reason). This is definitely a writing style that fits the atmosphere and scenery. Short, but filled with image and explanation that gives the story the guidance it needs.
For this being a genre that doesn't really intrigue me, it really helped me recall the dots of what I have read previously of this style and made connections to sense what is about to or may happen which is nice because I can feel the intensity of the characters minds and actions and the story-line (so far) and this is just the first chapter.
Many more "wants" await the readers ahead for the next chapters to come along.
This is astonishing!
The deep, thick, heavy imagery is like you are painting a high-detailed moving picture with words to make it mystical and give it the movement that makes it come alive in our brains to create what we see, what we think and feel.
A true work of art.
Just like what Lynnyan said, you are talented and deserve more and the best.
It...It...It fits too perfectly. I don't know what else to say.
This just fits so well. The structure and flow is nice and clean along with progression of the story.
I was thinking at first, "oh, it's losing a friend." Well it wasn't losing a friend in the way I thought of it.
This hit me hard, not just emotionally, but also in a connection. I've lost a friend from suicide and ever since then, I've been different and just wondering "what we didn't have" after.
Great poem and thank you for giving me a connection, a way to have my thoughts and feelings expressed even when this is in your words and I'm just reading it.
The progress in detail of this stranger-than-fiction word 'love' in a personal way is astounding. From words, actions, feelings and meaning, it's all there.
As long as the hands of time turn, love will come again.
I can totally relate to this in it's meanings because I'm one of those people who takes time to appreciate everything.
The words are structured in such a way when just spoken with no heavy emotion or changes in tone, it holds value to it.