TheForgotten

It has a very pleasant flow. It's also an extremely important topic which has proven to be a problem in many people's lives and I think you illustrated that beautifully :)

I really liked this, it flows well. Good job! :)

You did an amazing job at pulling the reader into the scene, it was lovely :)

Very inspiring story, you are doing a great job!

That was very lovely. I like the soft tone to it and it flows nicely. A job well done!

I really enjoyed this, I think the structure was well put together and word usage was great. I hope to see more from you in the future!

I really love the idea and how you executed it. Description was lovely and really drew the reader in. The only problem I saw was in the "light" it was difficult to keep up without any previous context to the story. A prologue could help with that. Overall I thought it was very good and I hope you continue it!

It is easy to understand why you were upset. It is easy to feel like no one cares, we all experience that, it's a part of life. But the important part is knowing that there is always going to be someone who will care. It is unfortunate how your mother reacted to the situation, but perhaps she is just as afraid as you are. Hang in there!